We thought we would go with something a little different today with dialogue between Chloe and a minor character (this may be the only time she appears) while Chloe's distracted.
Sunday, October 26, 2014
Sunday, October 19, 2014
Today we're picking up right where we left off last week between Chloe and Gabriel...
“How are you with barbecues?”
“Fine. I only started the one fire.”He looked at her, saw her smirk. “Just the one?” He stepped out of the way, giving her the spatula, heading back into the kitchen, finding the condiments and buns. He brought them out to the side table beside the barbecue, and looked at Chloe, who seemed to sense his gaze.
Sunday, October 12, 2014
Sunday, October 5, 2014
We have something a little different today. A couple of times through the manuscript, we left the point of view of our main characters and supporting characters and saw things through the perspective of other residents: animals. In this case, a coyote making his rounds in the vicinity of the home of Chloe's mother. Here he sees the arrival of Chloe and Gabriel on the farm.
He considered the land his own, crossing the farm periodically as part of his wanderings. He had come through the orchards often, knew the voices of the people in the area, preferred to avoid them. Instead he moved quickly, quietly, in the shadows, always on the hunt. Rabbits were the preferred prey in his diet, and he knew well enough to avoid the farms in the area that had livestock. While that kind of prey might be easy to hunt, doing so brought other problems.
The coyote had seen the car pull up at the farmhouse from a distance, had seen the younger couple step out. The female was related, in some way, to the woman who lived there. Her cub, he thought. The male was a newcomer, had only shown up recently. I wonder if they’ve mated yet, the coyote thought.
Sunday, September 28, 2014
Picking up a bit from where we left off last week in our manuscript, we have Dana's complaints as Gabriel and Chloe pick up her, Olivia, and Rachel at the airport in St. Louis.
"This was the worst flight I've ever been on," Dana said as they all walked through the busy concourse, the flight from New York having had arrived safely.
Chloe laughed. "You say that after every flight." She looked at Gabriel. "Didn't I tell you?" He nodded, smiling.
"I was seated next to a guy who looked like a terrorist and had a voice like Wally Cox."
"Wally--who?" Chloe asked.
Dana shot her a look. "Oh, come on, Chloe--you're not that much younger than me!”
Olivia spoke up. "He was a bit of a character," she confirmed.
"I heard him say something about vomiting," Rachel recalled.
Chloe looked to Gabriel again. He leaned close and whispered, "It's going to be a long night."