Sunday, June 29, 2014

Snippet Sunday: Foreplay And Preludes

Another passage from Same Time Tomorrow, this time picking up where we left off.


She cried out softly at the sensation. She was warm and moist inside, ready for him. He stroked lightly, his finger exploring, stimulating. She did the same, still content to keep her hand out of his pants, but definitely enjoying stroking him, caressing him.
Chloe kissed him hard, her tongue probing his mouth, finding his tongue. It was all he had ever wanted. No one had ever aroused him this deeply, this much.... not like this. He slid his hand back, out from her, and she felt it, looked at him, puzzled. He licked at his finger, his first sample of what she tasted like. God, she’s incredible, he thought. “Chloe,” he whispered, “We need to be naked.”


9 comments:

  1. Sensual snippet, James and Scarlet. :)

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  2. H-O-T. Love it!

    [The only thing, and it's minor, is there seems to be a shift in POV. In the first P we're in Chloe's POV (otherwise how do we know she's content to keep her hands out of his pants?). I had to read it twice to realize that we're actually in his POV throughout.]

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  3. Nice catch, Karysa... I think even just adding the word seemed in there would clarify that. Something to keep in mind when we get to revisions.

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  4. Nice, sexy snippet and I love the last line!

    Nancy

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  5. Great snippet. Hot and sensuous.

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  6. Nicely done. Down & dirty, just the way it should be. Too bad more people didn't come by to read it. They're missing out.

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  7. Wow, they do need to be naked... and fast.

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