Sunday, April 13, 2014

Snippet Sunday: The Demise Of Chivalry

We have another passage today from our manuscript, with our leading lady's inner thoughts early on....


She opened her umbrella and set it on the floor to dry. In her mind, she could hear her mother’s voice: “It’s bad luck to open an umbrella indoors, honey.”
I’m not tempting fate, Mom. The bad luck’s already arrived.
She hadn’t had time for breakfast, and now her stomach was reminding her it needed nourishment. She took a large chocolate bar from the top drawer of her desk, unwrapped it and took a big bite. She went to the window. The rain was showing no signs of letting up. She thought of that pig who’d taken her cab. Chivalry’s not only dead, it’s entombed in the bowels of the earth, she thought. Even after ten years of life in the so-called concrete jungle, there was a part of her that longed to be the princess, rescued by the gallant prince and carried off to a beautiful, far away kingdom. Not in the cards, Chloe thought, taking another bite.

6 comments:

  1. Aww. She's had a rough day. But I get a feeling she's about to meet Prince Charming.

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  2. Great snippet--too bad for the jerk who took her cab. If she'd have called my cab driver hero of "Mr. Short, Dark...& Funny," that wouldn't have happened. Love the line about the umbrella--I try never to open mine indoors either.
    nancy

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  3. Norma wrote her very early on with a very cynical, jaded world view. It's as we go along that we see the reasons why.

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  4. I really love the beginning of the snippet- it's what makes me want to know more.

    "She opened her umbrella and set it on the floor to dry. In her mind, she could hear her mother’s voice: “It’s bad luck to open an umbrella indoors, honey.”
    I’m not tempting fate, Mom. The bad luck’s already arrived."

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  5. Chocolate. I like her already.

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