We have another passage today from our manuscript, with our leading lady's inner thoughts early on....
She
opened her umbrella and set it on the floor to dry. In her mind, she
could hear her mother’s voice: “It’s bad luck to open an umbrella indoors,
honey.”
I’m not tempting
fate, Mom.
The bad luck’s already arrived.
She hadn’t had time
for breakfast, and now her stomach was reminding her it needed nourishment. She
took a large chocolate bar from the top drawer of her desk, unwrapped it and
took a big bite. She went to the window. The rain was showing no signs of
letting up. She thought of that pig who’d taken her cab. Chivalry’s not only
dead, it’s entombed in the bowels of the earth, she thought. Even after ten
years of life in the so-called concrete jungle, there was a part of her that
longed to be the princess, rescued by the gallant prince and carried off to a
beautiful, far away kingdom. Not in the cards, Chloe thought, taking
another bite.
Aww. She's had a rough day. But I get a feeling she's about to meet Prince Charming.
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet--too bad for the jerk who took her cab. If she'd have called my cab driver hero of "Mr. Short, Dark...& Funny," that wouldn't have happened. Love the line about the umbrella--I try never to open mine indoors either.
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Norma wrote her very early on with a very cynical, jaded world view. It's as we go along that we see the reasons why.
ReplyDeleteI really love the beginning of the snippet- it's what makes me want to know more.
ReplyDelete"She opened her umbrella and set it on the floor to dry. In her mind, she could hear her mother’s voice: “It’s bad luck to open an umbrella indoors, honey.”
I’m not tempting fate, Mom. The bad luck’s already arrived."
Chocolate. I like her already.
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